Tuesday, July 12, 2016

editing

Eek, I have been editing the second book in the Hemstreet Witches series. Monday somehow totally got away from me. Since it's where I am editing, to give readers an idea of the kinds of things I am looking to improve, here is an excerpt where I am working showing the changes I am making. There was one paragraph change also where I put a sentence with a paragraph it had been following. More changes may follow as this is the first edit and ahead of the beta readers.

Some writers give beta readers chapters to work with all along. I save them for when I think it's ready-- and they find things to show me it wasn't.

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   Walking into the restored building, converted into a small theater and meeting rooms, Elke was glad to see saw David Jefferies, Pamela Crosby, and two women she didn’t recognize on the stage and, sitting at a table. “You’re late,” he said as he rose and gave her a hug.
   “I’m sorry. Torre and I got involved in planning the changes we want to make in Mellow Yellow, and I lost track of time.”
   “Nothing major I hope,” Pam Crosby said dusting Elke’s cheek with a brushed kiss before sitting back down. “I love your choices as they are.”
   “Elke, our actresses new to you, Debbie Johnson and Colette Ames, are interested in Stage Left. Chuck was supposed to be here tonight. Not sure what happened to that.”   Debbie, pretty, blonde and bubbly, was the age to play ingĂ©nues while Colette looked a little older than Elke. 
   “Chuck?”
   “Charles Carter. He’s been a leading man in some of the other theaters around here. I had hoped to interest him in small our little theater.”

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Elke is interested in getting a play produced there to give magic workers better publicity. Her desire to improve the reputation of natural witches leads her into her adventure in 'To Speak of Things Unseen.'  There is one sentence there I am still uneasy about but will leave it for a second go-round to see if it still draws me out of the action. If it does, it might disappear totally or get reworked.
 



2 comments:

Tabor said...

i am sure you have written this somewhere. How much do they charge?

Rain Trueax said...

Beta readers generally do it for free because they like the author's other books. They get the books, of course, the finished version if they wish. I also like to give them a gift certificate but that can be tricky if they end up doing reviews as Amazon can take the view you paid them for a good review. That is not the case.

Copy editors or proofreaders, the ones who have a responsibility to professionally edit, can get paid from a few hundred dollars up to over a thousand.